How Writers Can Create A Powerful Dilemma To Make Their Stories Better - Jeff Kitchen
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I have a rule when I write. "It's never just one problem." It is very simple, but j find it always, always elevates the visceral reaction of people listening to my stories once they realize that. The second problem is what makes two simple problems a completely unique one
You need one problem, one character.
Thanks for the tip this is very intersting
@@DAMON409 absolutely not...u need interesting emotional and physical problems arranged in a heirachy.
Predictability isn't always a problem. If he ditches Skylar and ends up working his miserable job, that's a viable -- kinda tragic -- ending. If ends up working with Skylar's people and gets burned from his career and left out in the cold, that's also valid. There's nothing wrong with a story that shows you a character who is set up to be destroyed between two ends of a dilemma and then _is_.
Exactly. FBI accosts him, they show evidence and make him cooperate, forcing a decision. But then his love is too strong and he breaks the law and sacrifices himself to warn Skylar, but she tells him that she's going to be fine, that she's got protection, that he's a great guy and he should go and live his life with someone that would truly love him, and then maybe he notices a woman that's been present in his life but he never appreciated her or something.
I agree, predictability isn't a problem, and I believe the execution is what matters more. 1984 is an iconic example that is very similar to the narrative pitched here, although the internal dilemma was between security and ethics. It ends in one of the two predictable endings. I think what caught everyone off guard was HOW it was delivered, and it was the details of the delivery that made it so horrifically memorable.
What if he works with Skylar's people and gets away with it? What if he makes all bad acts look like the company's fault?
Everyone sees endings as having to be happy or tragic, but a resolution can linger and be as morally gray as the story dilemma.
@@andrewryan2814 that's also a good opportunity to take the readers own morality into account whether the outcome was a good or bad one and whether Dereks decisions were justified.
This guy is amazing! My whole direction in writing has been changed by watching this video. What an epiphany!
Same here!
Donate money bro be grateful
My take-away is, Jeff Kitchen is a genius at formulating and expanding a story. In a matter of minutes, he wrote your entire story. WOW! I gleaned so-o-o-o much for my own story. I, no doubt, will need to rewrite my entire outline, and first chapter. wow! I feel he was actually picturing that story in his mind and probably forgot about the interviewer and that she was there, the way he kept looking up and using his hands. My goodness. I'd give anything to have Jeff's mind for just an hour. Too bad I can only like this once.
First take away is that Jeff Kitchen is brilliant at expanding ideas. I was excited to realize I had already created a "3rd door" for my protagonist. Listening to Jeff explain why the dillemas in films like *Training Day* & *The Firm* connect with the audience gave me a few notes on how I should approach cranking up the drama.
I have watched a lot of these kinds of videos. I think this guy is the best i have watched. He gets it. And he explains things very well.
he is amazing! THANKS to film courage for featuring Jeff Kitchen because i am now one of his students.💯💖
Wow, I need this guy sitting next to me and help me with my script. He's so good o_O
I like way that he looks as though he's seeing the story develop right in front of him when he looks up or off to the side.
wow, he really ran with that one in an impressive way! good stuff. thank you both!
Glad you enjoyed it!
He was working hard to breathe some life into that idea...!
Not good. I don’t how he thinks he can go on for that long without asking a single question. Just likes to hear himself talk, I guess. You ALWAYS ask questions. The most important thing in giving advice isn’t giving advice: it’s asking the right questions and actually ENGAGING with the artist. You can’t just monologue. WTF. This isn’t advice: this is a preacher.
@@filmcourage hi I’m writing hindi script but I’m not getting pick up points i want see old script just to compare
@@TomorrowisYesterday except she specifically asked him to TEACH, which is what he was doing. The entire point of this exercise was to give an example of how to break down broad concepts into concrete ideas that could potentially result in forward courses of action. The intended takeaway here was not for the specific plot details but broad-stroke ideas and processes. She gave him a rough example and he demonstrated different, specific methods for thinking through dilemma escalation and conflict resolution. He did exactly what she asked him to do and I found it fascinating and enlightening.
This is great. I loved how you gave the outline so the guest could work it out live. This made for a great teaching lesson. Thanks so much. Learned quite a bit.
He makes it make sense which is always appreciated. In essence he gave her a true representation of her story even without knowing much about her story.
This is a masterclass. It's amazing watching his process. What an extraordinarily generous guy!
More to come!
One of the reasons Derek got into IT was because he had been burned by relationships in the past. In IT you have stakeholders and computers and Derek knows how to handle them. Also being in computer security he is really keen on sniffing out social engineering attacks. He works with the people in his company on a very professional level and doesn't get intimate about anything. Until he meets Skylar. Even though he has a keen nose for fraud he is bewitched by Skylar because he has fallen for her. He opened him self up when he knew better not to do that. This would make for a great dark night of the soul.
Love it. I hadn't totally envisioned Derrick's backstory (or Skylar's), just a bit about their upbringings. Great addition to figuring out why he would be in this situation. Thank you for watching.
Besides her looks, he is attracted to her because of her high intelligence that he quickly discovers on their first 'chance' meeting. He realizes that they speak the same 'language', so there's also an irresistible intellectual attraction. In one night while throwing ideas around, they develop a conceptual framework for a new algorithm that will revolutionize...(fill in the blanks). They would make a good team, but in that there emerges the conflict of loyalties... Great interview that ties in beautifully with the Alan Watt (90 day) process.
Con artists use emotional manipulation, they stir up your emotions rather than let you make rational decisions. For example, every phone call begins with shouting your name.
In the end, he skirts between the two wolves (worlds lol) by giving Skyler what he wants while maintaining his career integrity. Despite that, Derek and Skyler go their separate ways, see each other in passing, and then become rivals in their individual unique positions. Enter soft cliffhanger for sequel.
I know I’m 2 years late but I caught this interview today on a story crafting binge and I found your idea fascinating. I hope you’re still working on it!
Jeff gives 30 minutes of gold and then says "Is that helpful?" Haha -- YES! Excellent advice. Breaks things down simply and reassuringly to get a plot on the right track. I really appreciate this interview.
It's amazing to watch the process evolve. I take a lot out of the typical talk on how to make your writing better. But to see it in action is far more impactful.
All of this makes sense to me, which is reassuring for my own process. Just need to be reminded you're on the right track sometimes.
More of a jeff kitchen!
We still have a lot more!
I concur!
My current character drafting could use some of this. I can see them with much more impact. Brilliant, Jeff.
These videos are pleasing to watch and the audio feels raw and real.. like your sitting there with them.
He could then try to play her to bring down the company she is working for? Lots of possibilities.
Sort of like Jin-Roh.
So if this is a real script, send me a message on you tube. The character of Derrick, or Derek if you want to use the form my father used to name my brother, is very much like me. I had a commodore 64, I was big into computers as a teenager, and today I'm a cyber security engineer. However, my life between those points was much different than "go to college, get job, work my way up in job." It was more windy with a military career in between. I think I could help with the idea. As I listened to the whole video in my car on my way to work I kept thinking of different ways to move the characters, depending on the genre. Just a thought.
Perfect! Thank you! Your discussion of the protag's "internal dilemma" helped me sharpen my story's outer and inner conflicts that, up to this point, were muddled and running into one another.
Watching this man develop an otherwise milquetoast character into something worth following is worth the time invested in this video. Brilliant!
Predictability is really boring, in real life or in stories, amplify the dilemma, the magnitude, don't make sedative dilemma's where the audience says - "so what, who cares", the third creative solution decided on the feet, the story must have a powerful impact on the audience, they must be transformed, transfigured, never think the same way again, a great story must change the world, and the BEST ONES DO!!!! great lesson from Jeff Kitchen, thanks to FC.
i loved the way he explained everything
Interesting story, Jeff Kitchen is brilliant. Out of the blue expanding the importance of dilemmas as part of a story in such a short time, clear thinking, but also in principle describing the issues of human nature in a very touching way. Simply brilliant. it could be an amazing job to describe and develop the magic involved in Skylar's atraction without clichés in outrageous ways and make the reader so interested to help creating ideas for the third option with his own imagination. And surprise him!
This was incredible. One of my favorites yet!
I think the more eviseral transition where the dilemma comes to a crux is when he discovers at the end of Act II that she has been manipulating him. So we, the audience, might know / suspect that she's dirty, but the series of security breaches at work & the blossoming romance should be fairly separate story lines until late. Thus his work life comes into conflict w his personal life and his inability to solve the IT problem is shown to be directly related to his off-work activities. This whole thing has been about Derek's dilemma, but another option is for HER to be an unwilling pawn in the situation. Thus Derek might he able to rescue her from them (thus salvaging their relationship) & turn the tables on the hackers at the same time ala Luke turning Vader from the darkside. In the final scene, the cards are revealed to show the reality of the situation which could be 1 of several different scenarios depending on the writer's choice. A) She lied. Her sad backstory was made up. B) He lied. He used her to get the hackers. C) Her handler is her husband. Her relationship was a lie. D) He lied. He paid her husband to hack the company to steal a billion dollars, but now he's double crossing them so they get nothing. E) etc.
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This was a fun exercise the interviewer offered. I played along while Mr. Kitchen provided his analysis. So enlightening. I see others did the same thing. I came up with the idea that The Woman and The Boss of the company are both close childhood friends that MC must choose between. The Girl disappeared in childhood, and has now reappeared as a corporate spy (though he doesn't realize it's her right away.) I think making MC's loyalty to the company personal works better in most cases. I came up with a whole history involving kidnapping, murder investigations, lying, near death, etc. HUGE core wound for MC. He only recovers his memories gradually and realizes that The Woman asking him to help her spy is actually The Girl from his childhood. Rather than being dead as everyone believes, she was kidnapped by her aunt to circumvent Family Court and rescue her from an abusive but charming mother. MC's powerful attraction to The Woman is due to this old, wounded connection. His loyalty to Bossman is the other side of that. Young Bossman convinced Young MC that the police suspected him of The Girl's murder, because in fact Young MC helped them escape - a fact he's forgotten through trauma. By lying to the police (an event which helped him discover his talent for manipulation) Young Bossman supposedly saved Young MC from prison. Meanwhile, The Girl's loss of her legal identity has led to her becoming a skilled corporate spy who trades identities like putting on a new set of sunglasses. This dilemma is nearly unbearable for MC. Only by discovering that he himself has been brainwashed by Bossman into thinking he owes him more than he really does, can he break free and make a choice between these two. And help The Woman recover her own sense of who she is. Meanwhile, the external struggle has to do with the nature of Bossman's business. I think making it quirky has comedic power. I see him as a portrait painter to the rich, very famous, the kind of magnetic guy who sells himself rather than his product. He also has art apprentices. His dirty secret is that he cannot paint at all. His students do all the work, and they can't tell anyone because he has them sign NDA's. They must teach themselves painting by doing all the work. Naturally, MC has signed one also, as well as a non-compete agreement. He loses his whole living if he breaks these agreements. It is hard to choose between methods of solving the dilemma. I think it's clear with this scenario that MC needs to choose The Woman. But he can't do what she wants, exactly, because he needs to help her escape a life that's unhealthy, an expression of lost self. Somehow he needs to keep juggling his relationships, stringing everyone along while trying to solve issues. I would probably have a lot of episodic problems with the students, the rich portrait subjects, and of course The Woman's and The Bossman's demands. I think MC would end up compromising a bit, doing a few things that both of them want him to do, until crises build up and he must get clever. I think before he could defeat Bossman, he would have to convince The Woman that it's time to change her life, and then the two of them could execute a plan together. Perhaps Bossman would even be OK with their actions once he realizes who she is. The key to that would be a wound of his own, I suppose, and some unexpected way that he's healed just by dealing with having his fake life and his power to manipulate taken away.
I suppose bringing The Mother of The Girl back in as the arch-enemy would help create the climactic crisis.
Great video. That’s a great recipe from the kitchen!
One of the very best! Thank you! Super helpful and practical.
The Firm ends quite differently in the novel, and I prefer that ending. It is also a 'third way out'.
Agreed. The movie, in my opion, was decidedly meh. Case in point, watch the trailer ... so much running and running and running.
These interviews are great!
Thanks Thomas, we have a new video with Jeff Kitchen going up at 5pm PST tonight!
Wow, this guy is amazing!
Great live masterclass
Masterful impromptu storytelling skills !!!!
I loved that he mentioned The Firm as an example of the protagonist creating a third path, after being stuck between the problems of the two “right and the wrong” paths, they break a new door between them
If this movie got made I want Miles Teller as Derrick and Margot Robbie as the seductive Skylar
Perfect! Thank you for watching.
You spoke my mind!
Great casting. Margot Robbie is the perfect piece of cheese in the mousetrap. There's a great line from a detective novel I read somewhere, "He knew she was a trap, but the cheese in the mousetrap was just too awesome to walk away from."
@@jeffkitchen1549 cheese too awesome to walkaway from? Idk "awesome" seems to generic a description for me
[31:49] - Fantastic example about Moral Dilemma & 3rd way out in the *The Firm*
Thanks 😊
Brilliant! Learned a lot watching this.
Perhaps over the course of the movie theres a change in his personal character and he decides to do the rite thing. He leaves his corrupt company/career and also leaves the woman he loves because he realizes that she was just trying to use him. basically loses everything and moves far away. The girl is so surprised and enamored by his decision and finds out that she has actually fallen for him. in the last scene we see the guy working his simple shaved ice bar in a tropical location. someone places the help wanted sign on the counter...he looks up to see the girl he loves...Romantic comedy ending...
I luv that Jeff said it’s like he gets out of jail. That’s a great description. This talk is so helpful.
Immediately bought his book after watching it
The training day analogy/analysis is awesome
This was very helpful. Thank you. Mr. Kitchen is brilliant.
this dude is good - so great watching him brainstorm
Dang! He really ran with that! And I love the "Is that helpful?" at the end there. XD
She wrote "Paranoia" with Harrison Ford and he made it into a great love intrigue💪🏾 I give respect when respect is due.. RESPECT, that was dope
Great stuff
Very good lessons learned. Thank you guys
Make her truly fall in love to him as well and then that's how you make the conflict more realistic and stronger and in the climax both of the companies are going after them and then make them run away together. In the resolution something happened between the two companies and now they're free. The final picture is they both have different jobs now and have made a family of their own.
More like Jeff HOUSE! This guys got it all!
Derek wants to play along with Schuyler because he's interested in learning how much complexity she has to offer; he enjoys the potential challenge. As they become more entangled, he finds she's actually the pawn of a bigger player, perhaps a mastermind of corporate espionage.
Wow! Jeff Kitchen ladies and gentlemen such profound knowledge in storytelling.
Another one coming tomorrow at 5pm PST.
@@filmcourage looking forward to it!
This was awesome and I instantly had an idea to change the objective of my protagonist. Thanks!
Great advice!
I love to see those wheels spinning, give him a thought and it becomes a story in his mind and he runs with it.
These Rock!
Thanks.
This is how you should write. Just sit and get into it, get high, whatever, and just let your mind wonder. The physical part of typing is manual labor, THIS is the creative process.
I want a podcast where people come on and tell interesting stories from their lives to Jeff Kitchen and then he breaks the stories down structurally
I like this because im working on something similar to this
The idea reminded of Ex Machina. The computer programmer is a pawn in a game of manipulation.
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The jack metaphor made my day.
this is so cool to watch
More to come...
this man is a wizard!
This isn’t a story. It’s just a situation. What’s the premise, what’s the point of the narrative? A story must illustrate a premise. Otherwise all you have is one thing happening after another after another after another.
(around 27:10) I I will need to rewatch this bit again, because I don't quite get the bit about everything going wrong/everything going right but that being the worst possible outcome. Nevertheless, I really liked this talk. I feel like it helped me a lot. I specially enjoyed that his teachings came from a general story idea, instead of just telling us the techniques without applying them to a story. Thank you so much!
Great to see you finding value with this segment! We like this one a lot and think of it like a mini-class.
He's saying that the crisis point is where the main character has to make a decision and/or take action based on the pressure they are under that has been building. It could be that everything was getting worse and worse leading to that crisis point. It could also be that everything was going to plan, but a sudden reveal/turn/twist means failure (worst possible thing happens at the worst possible moment even if on the brink of success). Either way, the end of act 2 usually ends in failure, to some degree (assuming it is a story with a "happy" ending, and not a tragedy) otherwise the story would be resolved at the three quarter stage. I think Pixar movies are good examples of movies with dilemmas that are perfectly paced (if perhaps a little conventional)
@@Ruylopez778 it’s also the case that the crisis point comes when the character achieves their action goal and should feel victorious, only to discover it wasn’t the true action goal or that it didn’t fulfill their emotional need and so they turn into the third act to attain that true victory
I think the best way to inflate the adventure part of the dilemma, is that Derrick lost his wife, and has been avoiding moving on. Skylar broke him out of that rut, so he becomes loyal to her even though she is playing him. If his weakness is arrogance, then he might try to outmaneuver Skyler, then this will let him betray his loyalty to his company, while thinking he is engaging espionage for the betterment of both Skyler and the company.
Very cool interpretation. I wonder if Derriks resolution of his dilemma can become a love dance with Skylar, making it more of a romantic nerd comedy :)
Suggestion to avoid spoilers. When there is an spoiler alert it would be great to add a text info in the video telling in what time spoiling ends.
Professional (and/or ethical) integrity pitted against internal desires (either money/greed or lust.)
Is it more believable for the audience if Derek is revealed half way through to have know from the outset that Skylar is working for others? So he knew he was going to be betrayed but is faced with the choice once he understands her better? Parallels The Thomas Crowne Affair and Point Break. How does the audience feel about a character if they forgive someone who betrays them? Thanks for a very enjoyable listen!
The guard-dog personality he describes reminds me of the "fixer" character in Hail Ceasar. (What a great film!)
Great
I just recently found your channel - but do you do these questions often with your guests? I found myself replaying the first 1:30 minutes, finding more and more angles to develop the story - and bouncing my ideas off of People in the biz is just great fun and a valuable exercise!!!
What was the movie call, Fern? I'm trying to look for it but this guy bring so much value in stories and characters I don't think people are going for nowadays, awesome insight
I'm thinking of Derek not caring about anything just to be with Skylar is sad. That is a story arc you need to change and make a happy ending. I think the story needs Derek to care about 'what is at stake' with his life to intensify the problem. A realization of what makes a man really happy. He needs to find out what life is really all about. Adding romance is telling us that romantic love solves everything. But i think it is deeper than that. If i am the writer, i will add a ticking bomb, maybe a terminal disease to push him to live a happy life. That is better than boredom as a catalyst. Maybe the medication causes him to hallucinate. :). Maybe Skylar doesnt really exist. And maybe a backstory explaining why he chose to stay in that stagnant world of IT because no one can force anyone i believe. Skylar is an embodiment of someone in his unsettled past. We know he can leave the IT world if it bores him. It is not really a problem. And romance is not enough solution. There is no life and death situation and real 'at stake'. It is a rebirth story of Derek.
in his mind :D and wakes up to go to the construction factory... - How was your trip Tomas?
Question 1: What genre is this? Romcom? Thriller? Action? Drama? Q2: Is this a feature film, indie film, short film, show, 90 minute stage play, 120+ minute stage play, novel, short story, or something else. (An issue I’m seeing is that this could easily end up as a short film because there just isn’t much potential for hardship unless you really milk it. Dramas in and of themselves ate already hard to get produced if you don’t have name (in film)). Q3: What is your goal for this story? What are you trying to make the audience feel by the end? Q4: Where does the actual story begin? You started with a backstory, but I’m not sure where you intend to place the first scene. It should be as late as possible. Q5: What does your main character want to achieve at the beginning and how is he showing that? These are the kinds of questions you must ask before monologuing for 25 minutes straight. Honestly you should never monologue for 25 straight minutes when giving advice to someone sitting right in front of you. Talk WITH the person, not AT the person.
Reminds me of one of the greatest short stories ever, New Rose Hotel😭😭😭
I know the video is old but o got to thinking about the characters. I could easily see him deciding to go on a fall arc and going down a path with her, only to find out that the rivals companies motives are even worse, making him stuck 2/3 of the way into this, no way back and too far in, then getting stuck having to make this choice to lose it all or fall completely.
love this, i was just listening to a podcast about people who companies hire to hack their own facility and test their security. theres alot of veeery interesting material in their that will work sooo well with this story. its a take on deception i've never seen before honestly and with how clinical i'm imaginning it. i can only think of it as a fincher movie lool. Also the skylar deception thing has to be an absolute stealthily exeecuted sneak attack on the audience, like we sshouldnt see that coming at all. The main character should be up to his nose solving another problem that we are interested in seeing him solve then baam! it turns out his love interest was a sham, i mean omg very embarrassing to watch a character go through that honestly lool.
Thank you for the comment. This is part of where I got the idea. Had also listened to a "pen tester" who said he would leave a flash drive in the company parking lot with the label "Salaries for (fill in the year)." Then he'd throw it by the trash dumpster waiting for a snooping employee to empty their trash bin. Then they knew who was their weak link was...Appreciate you watching the video!
@@filmcourage omg such a wicked idea! MY DUMBASS would def fall for it 😂😂🤣🤣🤣🤣😭😭😭😭
good sting reference
All your comments so old here , let me refresh the section a little bit , when Jeff describes Derek and his character , what comes to mind is The Ozarks , Matt of The Ozarks
The genre seems most like a forbidden love story, like Romeo and Juliet going behind their parents back. Speechless … with to speech political speechwriters working for opposing candidates. The Thomas Crown affair 1999 …. with an art thief and a lady involved with museum security. You got two people wanting to be together, but you’re not completely sure if you can trust the one you’re with, because they work for the opposition. And then there’s the question of betraying the side you were supposed to be on. There is your conflict and dilemma.
Another example is Sampson and Delilah. In the end Sampson eventually killed many in the temple, his enemies, while he perished with them as well. The end was tragic and yet triumphant for Sampson’s people
Can I find conflict tips video from many professional Screenwriters?
Awesome interview. He got me thinking maybe Derrick had been burned in the past by a woman. It isn't going to happen this time though - or so he thinks. He sees an opportunity in his dilemma to be the bad boy for the first time in his life. And he thinks he can change skylar. But he's still smart. He betrays his company and gets the life he wants, but doesn't get the girl. Maybe when he realizes this, he betrays her to take her position as guard dog for the people she used to work for. I wrote this half way through the interview so he might go that way, lol.
Her story did need more dilemma and motivation for her protagonist. She had him laying down too easy. - but his head strong can’t get past me attitude did not fit with her story as she described it.--I would instead make the dilemma about loyalty. If this was his dream job and somebody gave him his chance, he shouldn’t want to betray them, even if he is bored. And what if there were consequences like people getting hurt or losing their jobs. All that could be one side of the dilemma. Then on the side where he’s in love with her, maybe he sees something of himself and her. Maybe she confessed her deception because she feels for him, or he saw through her. But either way he senses that she’s somehow trapped the same way he feels trapped in his job. So he wants to be with her but how can he make it work with them on opposing sides at rival companies? Could be like the movie speechless 1994
This man is a bit of a genius.
Derek has to value his dream job, so that when confronted by an alternative that he never expected, and one that is potentially dangerous, he really has a major dilemma. Does she really love him or is she just playing him? Does he risk his career and jail for her? Maybe the only way he finds out is when she reveals all to him and tells him that it was all a plan and that she can't go through with it. What about if it turns out that the company that is paying her is funding her mother's essential heart transplant and that if she fails the mission her mother could die. Perhaps Derek uses his computer skills to undermine her bosses and figures out a trick to syphon a lot of money out of her bosses 'black ops' account, enought to fund her mother's operation. The two stay together and Derek is promoted for his loyalty to the company.
This is beggging for some big twists/reversals. First, the "company" is the NSA and the rival company is the FSB (for highest stakes, something lesser for not-highest stakes, but I'd still make it super-high, like a pharm company Derrick words for has the cheap cure of HIV). Derrick turns it on them, uses her knowledge to get into their system. These are very smart people, and they keep jumping two steps ahead of the other, so the audience is always surprised at the cat and mouse game. One reversal is she's actually working for the Chinese, not the Russians, and she's trying to screw everyone up, not just Derrick's side. But all along, Derrick has some secret too. And of course Skylar has to do this because back in China, her child is being held and is at risk. Otherwise, no way would she. I'd think a lot about Skylar and her motivations and "what if this is her movie" to inform how I'd develop Derrick's story. If it's the pharma company instead, a big plot reversal would be, Derrick discovers that his employers have this, but they aren't going to bring it out and do it cheaply so that Africans can be treated; that they're all about profit. And Skylar is African-American, not many generations removed from Africa, with a brother who is a doctor there.... (But I'm a novelist, and probably don't know what I'm talking about, but it seems to me that "a company" needs to be really increased from "some company" up to life and death stakes.)
What are your main takeaways from this video?
How to look for conflict and find ways to put in character development ideas making for a better story and better movie
I've heard it said before, but I've never witnessed it during the brainstorming process until now: Story is a synthesis of character, setting, and plot. When pressured by conflict and an unsolvable dilemma in an organic way, all three become crystallized into a singular, powerful thematic principle. This is very instructive. Thank you.
Banal starting idea.
@@HomeAtLast501 They presented a premise that is lacking, and discussed how to make it more compelling for the writer and audience. It's taking an abstract idea and showing an example of how it works in practice. That's what the video is about.
@@Ruylopez778 I know.
He sounds like the creator of the world the scientist gets disappointed in. There's no one thing to point at without touching others, it's all possibilities and a huge network of pathways. P.s. The third path, yes. Thank you.
What if he hides out in the Cayman Islands but only until the statute of limitations is up, or some other time limit is up?
What if he makes a decision but can't stick with it? (Other problems that come out of nowhere should be foreshadowed; nothing should truly come out of nowhere)
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I would have it appear that Derick is going along with Skylar despite knowing her deception, yet he is instead playing her. His deception of her only gets revealed towards the climax.
And maybe give Skylar who her own dilemma as well?
Having re-watched this video for the third time, here is my approach: the essence of this story is faithfulness and betrayal. Derrick knows that his mother was unfaithful to his father at the start of their marriage. Derrick is indeed a workaholic and his efforts have brought his company good fortune...except that is not reflected in his recent pay-raise - a paltry amount, not what Derrick felt he deserved. Derrick's marriage is on the rocks. He assumes his wife is cheating on him...just like his mother did with his father. When Derrick meets Skyler, he views his budding relationship with her as a chance to get back at his wife...and his mother. Adding to his list of revenge, he considers betraying his company. Derrick is in the process of deciding whether to be faithful...to his wife (who is NOT being unfaithful to him, rather, he has grown apart from HER, due to his unresolved feelings about his mother's betrayal of his father). The climax comes when Derrick discovers that he is not his father's son; his mother's affair resulted in pregnancy and Derrick is the offspring of that other man. His grandmother might have let this info slip when she learned from Derrick that he was seeing another woman and she decided it was time for him to know the truth. In this climax, Derrick realizes that his attempt to betray both his wife and his company would make him just as guilty as he has felt about his mother...even before discovering the truth about himself. You might suggest it is hereditary: Derrick is "just like his mother" - except that repulses him to think he might be. In that moment he makes the decision to not betray his company and instead, alerts them to the plot and to Skyler's role. This results in the saving of Derrick's company and because he chose loyalty, he gets the raise he wanted...and then some. Derrick never consummated his budding relationship with Skyler...she never liked Derrick that way anyway. Regardless, Derrick works out his relationship with his wife and reveals to her his mother's betrayal and the fact that he is a bastard child. Their newfound honesty saves their marriage and Derrick has found his moral compass.